Vemon: Chapter 1 Teaser!

Electivire Gender : Number of posts : 341 Age : 27

Ben, I never said I hated it.
I'm just saying you could improve it more.

-Focus on better grammar for the viewers to understand.
-Try and not rush everything, Take it slow-
-What is your plot about? Who are the characters? Where is the scene-

These are the suggestions that could make the story better.

Subject: Re: Vemon: Chapter 1 Teaser! Tue Jul 13, 2010 11:25 am

Jimb, I'm just going to ignore you.So stop posting here.

Electivire Gender : Number of posts : 341 Age : 27

lol, See how you can accept criticism?
rofl.

I am just listing improvements.

It dosent suck, I'm just not convinced yet.

Subject: Re: Vemon: Chapter 1 Teaser! Tue Jul 13, 2010 11:35 am

It's a teaser...not a story yet...
You can't make judgements like that yet...

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